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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type crime.Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for commiting it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, in our country’s
crime
 rate is increasing day by day.Some kind of case is common in all our the world.As an example, in Brazil money heist is very popular.
Moreover
, in that
type
 of country robbery is very common.Many people believed that there should be fixed discipline for each number of felony without deciding or analysing the situation.I tend to think that sanction should be based on circumstances of individual scandal.
Firstly
, I would agree that
punishment
 is necessary for each violation.In some country like Saudi Arabia there is same
punishment
 for law of infraction.
Furthermore
, they do not think about the situation of
crime
.Due to it the corruption rate the lowest in
this
 country.In Saudi Arabia person gets fixed
punishment
, whether he steals a Bmw car or an apple.In my point of view, it is better for the government to save their money.Judgment is getting quickly by the jury member.We can
also
 save lots of time.
In addition
, because of that, another small
crime
 rate is going to decrease.
That is
 happening in the United States.
On the other hand
, my argument against the favour of that.I tend to believe that different
type
 of
punishment
 is essential for various crimes.In some case criminal is not guilty, but he is going to punish by the government.
Furthermore
, some criminal is a mental patient
also
.We have to think based on the circumstances of that.Because of that innocent does not get punished.
However
,
such
type
 of
crime
 like murder, sexual harassment for that fixed
type
punishment
 is important.That
type
 of
crime
 quick decision is necessary. To sum up, the criminal should be punished based on the situation and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account.Having said that, fix
punishment
 is significant for
such
type
 of
crime
 like rape and others.
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