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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps illustrate the access way to enter the City Hospital located inside the ring
road
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. There have been significant differences between the 2007 and 2010
situation
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. The
bus
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 stops change into the
bus
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 station, and the roundabout is added. So, there is no more direct
road
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 to the hospital. In 2007, there were six
bus
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 stops (three
bus
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 stop
in
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on
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 each side of the
road
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)
in
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on
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 Hospital
Road
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. On the east side of the
road
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, there was a parking area for staff and
visitor
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visitors
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. But, in 2010 the
bus
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 stop is changed into
the
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a
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bus
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 station.
In addition
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, two roundabouts
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also
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 constructed
in
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on
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 the north and south of
the
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apply
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Hospital
Road
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.
Besides
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of
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apply
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these changes, there is
also
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 a new car park.
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Initially
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,Initially
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 the parking lot for staff and
visitor
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visitors
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 was in the same area.
However
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, in 2010 the parking area has been separated. A new car park especially for the public is built on the east side of the City Hospital.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic flow
  • road access
  • ring road
  • bus stops
  • bus station
  • congestion
  • parking facilities
  • pedestrian crossings
  • vehicular flow
  • organizational structure
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • configuration
  • dedicated
  • diverting traffic
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