The graph below shows the average daily sales of selected food items at the Vista Cafe, by season. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average daily sales of selected food items at the Vista Cafe,  by season.  Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons  where relevant.
The bar graph shows how many
servings
of certain
food
items are sold on average every day in two different seasons at the Vista Cafe. The average
number
of
sales
of each
item
changed with the season. Certain
food
items had much higher
sales
than others in the winter. Hot
coffee
had the highest
number
of
sales
, with an average of 75
servings
sold daily.
Following
this
, the
item
with the second highest
number
of
sales
was soup, with an average of 50
servings
sold daily. Salad and ice cream had average daily
sales
of 25
servings
each, and iced
coffee
had the lowest
number
of
sales
, with close to zero
servings
sold daily. The
sales
numbers for each
food
item
were different in the summer from what they were in the winter. Iced
coffee
sales
rose significantly, to an average of 40
servings
sold daily. The
item
that had the second highest
number
of
sales
was ice cream, with an average of 35
servings
sold daily. Hot
coffee
sales
fell to just 30
servings
daily. Soup and salad had the lowest
number
of
sales
, with 25
servings
sold daily on average. In general, the average daily
sales
of each
food
item
changed when the season changed. Certain items were more popular in the winter, but certain others were more popular in the summer.

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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.

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