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You have been doing some voluntary work to help your local community. However, now you are unable to continue doing this work. Write a letter to the manager of the organization where you have been working. In your letter 1. describe the work you have been doing 2. explain why you can no longer do this work 3. recommend another person who is interested in the work

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Dear Mr. Symonds, I hope
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 email finds you in good health. I am writing
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 letter to provide some information about the
volunteer
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 work that I have been doing in your reputed organization since 2023. As a
volunteer
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, my prime responsibility is to provide academic learning for
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underprivileged children who are mainly living in the slum area.
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, I am responsible for coordinating with the local and international media about our ongoing projects.
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 I have been enjoying
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 task very much as I feel honoured to do
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 type of
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 work, I am no longer available to do
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 work from next month, because of moving to my hometown for family reasons.
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, before leaving
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 respectful job, I would like to recommend one of my close friends who is really interested in working as a
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. Since I will provide
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 notice period, I firmly believe that I will be able to ensure proper training for the recommended person if he is
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 selected. I hope you will consider my situation and will advise me about the recommended person. Yours faithfully, Thomas Hook

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coherence cohesion
Ensure your letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Each paragraph should deal with a separate aspect of the prompt. This structure helps the reader understand your points more clearly. Your letter generally follows this structure well, but make sure every new idea starts with a new paragraph to maintain clarity.
coherence cohesion
Use a variety of transition words and phrases to connect your ideas and paragraphs seamlessly. While your letter already has a good flow, using more diverse connectors can enhance readability and cohesion.
task achievement
It's important to fully address all parts of the task. You've done a good job of explaining your situation, the reason for leaving, and recommending someone else. However, expanding on the reasons for your departure and how it impacts your role could offer more depth to your response.
task achievement
Adopting a consistent tone appropriate to the context is crucial. Your letter has a suitably formal tone for communicating with a manager, and you've maintained it throughout. Being mindful of this in different contexts will serve you well.
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