The young today spend a large amount of their leisure time in shopping centres. It is feared that this could have a negative influence on the young and society. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view?

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S, YOUNG PEOPLE PREFER TO PASS THIER FREE
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IN DIFFERENT WAYS.SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT
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MOSTLY YOUNGTERS LIKE TO GO SHOPPING IN THEIR FREE
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WHICH COULD INFLUENCE NEGITIVELY OTHERS.FROM MY POINT OF VIEW
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PEOPLE SPEND THEIR MOST OF THEIR FREE
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STAYING HOME AND DOING OTHER ACTIVITIES. PEOPLE WHO SAY THAT TEENAGERS SPEND THEIR MOST OF THIER LEISURE
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IS DOING
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WHICH FOR ME ITS NOT TRUEI BELIEVE THAT
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TODAY THEY PRFER TO TY AT HOME BY DOING DIFFERENT ACTIVITIES.
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PLAYING COMPUTER GAMES
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CHATTING WITH THIER FRIENDS AND MANY MORE.
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SHOPPING IS NOT THEIR HIGHLY
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PASSING ACTIVITY
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WHILE THEY USE THEIR FREE
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STAYING COMFORTABLY DOING OTHER ACTIVITIES WHICH ARE MORE ENJOYABLE.
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I AGREE WITH PEOPLE THAT
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COULD BE HAVE NEGATIVE EFFECTS ON OTHER SOCIETY MEMBERS
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ESPECIALLY ON YOUNSTERS.IT COULD WEAK THE RELATIONSHIP WITH OUR NEIGHBOUR
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IF WE TEND TO ALWAYS GO OUT FOR MARKETING AND IGNORE OUR SOCIETY MEMBERS. SO FOR
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IT IS NOT THE GOOD WAY OF SPENDING FREE
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BUT IT DOES NOT MEAN THAT
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IS THE NLY ACTIVITY THAT CAN AKE SOME NEGATIVE IMPACTS ON SOCIETIES. SOME OF THEM ARE RELATED TO INDOOR ACTIVITIES
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WHICH I MENTIONED IN THE
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PARAGRAPH. I THINK THE WAY WE SPEND OUR LEISURE
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CAN INFLUENCE MORE THAN HOW WE SPEND OUR
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. ALL IN ALL
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I TOTALLY DISAGREE THAT,
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IS LARGELY USED BY YOUNG PEOPLE TO SPEND THEIR FREE
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BECAUSE HOME IS THE PLACE WHERE THEY PASS THEIR FREE
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.MEANWHILE
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WHATEVERE WE DO OUTSIDE OR INSIDE COULD HAVE NEGATIVE EFFECTS ON YOUNGS
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WE CANNOT BLAME ONLY
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