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Which is a better place for the aged, home or nursing home?

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Elderly people
are facing
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are faced
will be faced
 with a large number of difficult questions. Among them, the most important is a choice of their living
place
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.
Although
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 some people are happy to live
at
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in
 their own homes, others find nursing homes more convenient. On the one hand, home is a
cozy
enjoying or affording comforting warmth and shelter especially in a small space
cosy
place
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 where everyone feels safety, the
place
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 that person creates during many years, where he/she goes through all happy and sad moments, the
place
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 with memories and traditions that everyone establish by their own. It is obvious that many aged people want to live up to the end in their homes, especially if they have children who can give them a good care and support.
However
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, not always relatives have
opportunity
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the opportunity
an opportunity
 to look after their elderly parents.
Thus
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, I know some families that hire nurses who come or live in homes with their parents or grandparents, those women are well trained professionals, they know how to look after
aged
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age
aging
 people and can give them the
first
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 aids medical help if it is necessary.
On the other hand
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, the nursing homes become the perfect
place
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 for those, who are lonely or those, whose family members live far away. Aged people can find
there
of them or themselves
their
 new friends, hobbies, do sports, be more social, etc.
Moreover
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,
such
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 places are usually well medically equipped and
there
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they're
 a team of doctors who regularly check the health conditions of people who live there. Nursing homes are very popular abroad, in Canada, America, Australia, where the family traditions are less tight as in my country. I believe that elderly people should live with their children and it is important for them to feel their love.
However
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, at the same time, not all have
opportunity
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the opportunity
an opportunity
 to live with their families, than the nursing homes are becoming the best
place
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 for living.
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