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~2020-01-07: Task 1 You ride a bicycle to work, but there is a problem with the parking. Write a letter to the building manger to provide bicycle parking. In your letter, you should: • why you ride a bicycle to work • what the problem is with the parking • what your suggest are.

#bicycle #work #manger
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter with regard to the unavailability of a parking area for bicycles near the building premises. I am
resident
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a resident
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 of
this
 building, and my apartment number is A-27. Recently, I have instigated to travel to my office through cycles as it more
effiecient
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efficient
 and convenient for me.
Moreover
, it is
also
 beneficial for my physical health.
However
, it has come to my attention that there is no parking stand for bicycles in the entire building.
Furthermore
, many owners who
phave
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have
 a
bicylce
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bicycle
, either park it on the footpath or
besides
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beside
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 any other vehicles.
Additionally
, due to lack of
safety
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,safety
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 many complain of theft and damage. I would kindly request you provide a space for parking cycles. If I may, it would be profoundly
thoughtfull
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thoughtful
 if the space
besides
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beside
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 the main gate of the building can be utilized for installing a bicycle stand. I hope you could understand the situation and take
actions
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action
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 favourably. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours truly,
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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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