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You are living in a university residence, and you have a problem with the high levels of noise from a new campus restaurant which is open late at night. Write a letter to the governor of the University. In your letter, Complain about the situation Say why this is a problem And propose ways to reduce the noise

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Dear Ms Mai, I hope
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 letter finds you well. I am writing to express my concerns regarding the newly opened restaurant which is located near our university residence.
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 the restaurant’s convenient location offers potential benefits, there are significant issues associated with noise disturbances that adversely affect residents. Despite the positive aspects of the restaurant’s presence, the opening hours have become a source of disturbance to all individuals residing in the university housing. The high level of noise generated by patrons, including prolonged talking and shouting, lasted until midnight and hindered our ability to study and sleep effectively. Given the critical nature of the problem, I suggest that the university should restrict the business hours of the restaurant to about 11 p.m. on weekdays and leave it until midnight on weekends.
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, I propose to put some signs in front of the restaurant to remind customers to keep their voices at a reasonable level. These are simple solutions that we could employ to address the noise problem. I would appreciate it if the problem is solved soon. Thank you for your understanding and consideration of
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 important matter. Kind regards, Lana Nguyen

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task achievement
To improve Task Achievement, make sure to fully explore each point you raise. You have done well in suggesting solutions but expanding on their potential impact could further solidify your argument.
coherence cohesion
For Coherence and Cohesion, you've structured your letter logically and used paragraphs effectively. To further enhance, consider varying your sentence structure more for flow and using linking words to better connect ideas.
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