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Development in technology has brought various environmental problems. Some believe that people need to live simpler lives to solve environmental problems. Others, however, believe technology is the way to solve these problems. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is true that we are living in the era of
technology
 and facing with a numerous environmental issues. While some think that
such
 issues will be solved by
technology
 itself, I,
however
, agree with those who argue that we have to live simply in order to solve
such
 problems. On the one hand, it is thought that issues
such
 as global warming, deforestation, draughts and others will be solved by the advancement of
technology
.
For example
, in China, genetically modified food has been created by the Chinese scientist,
such
 as tomatoes, rice and other vegetables, for their population to combat with environmental problems.
Similarly
, many scientists from all over the world are doing extensive research to send humankind to Mars for the new start which is possible due to the advent of
technology
.
Hence
, it is argued that
technology
 is the only way for solving these issues.
On the other hand
, I would argue that living the simple life will solve
such
 difficulties easily and quickly owing to following ways.
Firstly
, a majority of the population should
use
 car-pooling method in order to control the pollution.
Also
, governments have to improve the public transport and encourage their citizens to
use
 it. Take London as an example, where most British citizens
use
 trains and tubes
instead
 of cars or bikes as there is a lot of improvement done by the UK authorities.
Finally
, in my opinion, to resolve
such
 environmental difficulties we have to
use
 solar panel
instead
 of fossil fuels. Due to
this
 not only will the pollution level, but
also reducealso
Suggestion
also reduce
also reduce also
 the temperature of the earth will reduce. In conclusion,
although
 some varies different opinion to solve the problems of environment, I will encourage everyone to live a basic life by using public transport and solar system.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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