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The maps below show the changes in New York city from 1990 to 2005

The maps below show the changes in New York city from 1990 to 2005
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The pictures below demonstrate how New York
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city
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 has been introduced and changed over the period of 15 years till 2005.
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, in 1990 the town was a much greener residential area with a large number of trees and industrial houses,
however
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, during the 15
years
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 the
city
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 experienced a number of dramatic changes. Looking first at the right
side
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 of
the
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New York
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city
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, the
amount
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number
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 of changes
occurred
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that occurred
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.
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, the trees were chopped down to make
factory
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factories
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,
airport
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airports
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 and small houses around the east area.
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, parking and railway stations in the south-eastern
side
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also
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hospital
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 and
school
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schools
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 in the north-eastern
side
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 were not changed from 1990 to 2005. Another interesting change is that, reconstructing
left
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the left
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side
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 of the
city
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 with supplemented modern
Supermarket
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. New York faced
with
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witness changes
according to
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 destroyed many tresses and industrial houses
instead
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 of modern buildings.
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,
new
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 stretch of railway was built running directly south.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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