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Many feel that today’s increasing demand for oil and gas must prompt scientists to look for new, future energy sources. Others feel we should not search for new energy sources because searching causes too much damage to the environment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#today’s #demand #oil #gas #scientists #future #energy #sources #search #damage #environment
Fossil fuels and gases have
became
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become
 essential for every
sectors
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sector
. With its raising ask, some people are suggesting to find new energy sources to
fullfil
put in effect
fulfil
fututre
the time yet to come
future
 needs, while other people believe that these findings cause damage to the environment and
therefore
 we should not look for new energy sources.
This
 essay will discuss both views and state that later option is more effective.
To begin
 with, it is
quit
to a degree (not used with a negative)
quite
understable
 that current fossil fuels are limited and it takes many years for its
composion
a concluding action
completion
 under the earth
crest
the outer layer of the Earth
crust
.
Therefore to
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Therefore, to
 waste money
exporing
inquire into
exploring
 for new sources is far
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
 draconian.
Instead
 of that,
government
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the government
 could invest
this
 fund in inventing new energies that are natural and renewable like solar
,
Accept space
,
wind and hydro. These energies are limitless and can be used for many centuries without any scarcity.
Secondly
, these
exploration
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explorations
 of new source cause damage to the inhabitance of near by area. Activities related to the refining of these fuels and gases generate tons of polluting gases into
environment
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the environment
. On the other end, natural energies are
enviroment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
 friendly and it does not create any kind of pollution. These kind of energies can be
prodce
bring forth or yield
produced
produce
 far from the localities and will not affect human lives.
There fore scientists
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Therefore, scientists
Therefore scientists
 should look for
new form
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new forms
a new form
 of energies. In the conclusion, according to me investing resources in finding new energy sources is not justifiable because of its limited
availablity
the quality of being at hand when needed
availability
 and polluting effects, government and scientists should invest their money and time in exploration of new
renwable
that can be renewed or extended
renewable
 and natural energies which are cheap and pollution free.
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