The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.

The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.
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The first graph shows that there is a gradual decrease in
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reasons with age. Nearly 80% of students under 26 years,
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for their
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percentage gradually declines by 10-20% every decade. Only 40% of 40-49yr
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and 18% of over 49yr
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studying
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reasons in late adulthood.
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, the first graph
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shows that
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stemming from
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increases
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with age. There are only 10% of under 26yr
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studying out of
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. The percentage
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slowly till the beginning of the fourth decade
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and
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dramatically in late adulthood.
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same
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number of 40-49yr
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for
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and
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70% of over 49yr
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in comparison to 18% studying for
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reasons in that age group. The
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graph shows that employer support is maximum (approximately 60%) for the under 26yr students. It drops rapidly to 32% up to the
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decade of life
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in late adulthood up to about 44%. It is unclear whether employer support is only for
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-focused
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, but the highest level is for those students who mainly
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purposes
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Vocabulary: Replace the words study, career, yr, olds, interest, increases with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Lifelong learning
  • Professional development
  • Adult education
  • Career advancement
  • Personal enrichment
  • Academic pursuits
  • Upskilling
  • Reskilling
  • Educational attainment
  • Tuition reimbursement
  • Flexible work arrangements
  • Work-study balance
  • Financial assistance
  • Professional growth
  • Study leave
  • Employee retention
  • Workforce development
  • Time management
  • Self-improvement
  • Motivational factors
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