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Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local language. If these are not taught many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how?

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From a mere communication tool to a designation of status, it has started becoming a tradition. English, nowadays, is not only a strong tool of expression, but part of our system. I believe it is important to gain an understanding of a
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 which is a gateway to the world.
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, neglecting our roots is not a solution. With globalisation, nations are changing from plural to multi
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cultural
. People from varied region, culture, community and country are living under the same
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roof, which
 escalates the need of a common
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.
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, people are getting familiar with English via different sources which makes it easier to learn as well as use, comparing to other languages.
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 being an international
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, it is a requirement for job seekers, whether it’s walking on the ramp or sitting for an interview, English seals the show.
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hand, with
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 interconnection of
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the world
 and increased
westernisation
assimilation of Western culture; the social process of becoming familiar with or converting to the customs and practices of Western civilization
Westernisation
, many cultures are shrinking,
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 local languages. But, is making a regional
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 part of an academic course a proper solution?
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, India, a plural nation, has majorly 122 languages, which makes local
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 a difficult choice to include in the course. Yet, educational systems shall engage in cultural and recreational activities not only to preserve a dialect, but to keep it alive. In my opinion, it is important for everyone to learn English.
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, learning and embracing one’s culture and
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 shall not be seen as a conflicting opportunity.

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