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Charities and organizations always give special names to particular days such as 'National Children's Day' and 'National Non-smoking Day'. What are the reasons for these particular days? How effective are they?

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Nowadays, people express great concern about the increase of the special days, like 'National Children's Day' and 'National Non-smoking Day', which were named
by
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with
 non – profit organizations. Some explanations for
this
 social trend will be put forward, before an analysis of its impacts on society life is given. The following grounds, in line with my perception and understanding, mainly account for why charitable organizations give the particular day’s new names. To start with, the naming of these days is primarily aimed at national important events, global alarming issues or vulnerable people in society,
such
 as the elderly, children and women.
Hence
,
this
 could be considered important occasions for people to celebrate anniversaries or express love and respect for those who deserve to receive more care from the whole community.
Besides
, in terms of social issues,
this
also is
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has also been
 a precious opportunity for
such
 organizations to create a worldwide recognition about these problems, attracting the public’s attention by demonstrating their effects on human beings. Admittedly, some citizens insist that it is not necessary to give a host of days new names for the charitable organizations’ promotion of public welfare because it can cause confusion for the masses.
However
, the fact supports that naming special days plays a pivotal role in the propagation of charities. As mentioned above, by setting up recognition in the global community,
this
 would raise people’s awareness of social problems,
such
 as environment pollution, violence against women and children, or the harm of smoking as well.
Hence
, it is not only an effective way to reduce detrimental effects in countries, but it
also
 helps people to raise the sense of responsibility to the community. In conclusion, the way charities and organization giving the names of particular days is necessary that could bring about a lot of benefits for countries and society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Raise awareness
  • Fundraising campaign
  • Advocacy
  • Policy change
  • Social reform
  • Community engagement
  • Collective action
  • Behavioral change
  • Educational tools
  • Health awareness
  • Public attention
  • Non-profit organizations
  • Initiatives
  • Support and solidarity
  • Resource allocation
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