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Modern technology is now very common in most work places How do you think this has changed the way we work? Do you think there are disadvantages to relying too much on technology?

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Nowadays, a large part of
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work
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the work
 we do involves using modern
technology
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 in almost all
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work places
a place where work is done
workplaces
. I reckon that
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 numerous alterations have been noticed in working conditions, it is disadvantageous for employee’s health and may lead to redundancy. Modern
technology
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 brings myriad improvements in
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 places.
Firstly
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, workers
do not spend
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does not spend
 much of their time and strength in
manufacturing process
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the manufacturing process
. Since
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 of them, almost all tasks are done by particular type of machines.
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, because of the advances of the
technology
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, most employees choose remote working. It enables them to hang out with their family and to deal with different jobs simultaneously or they do not have to waste their money and time on the way to
work
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.
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,
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 has influenced on hand
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 negatively. Most employers prefer to purchase contemporary electronics rather than spend their finance hiring workers. It causes high level of unemployment among individuals.
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, almost on a daily basis, we hear about the accidents occurring with workers because of using
technology
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 carelessly or everybody is aware that sitting in front of electronics for a long time affects sight, nerve system or blood circulation of employees. In conclusion, I consider that
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technology
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 is important for the betterments of working condition, utilizing them superfluously has negative influence on people’s life.

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