The pie charts show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in 2010
The given pie charts compare and contrast the household expenses made by
Japanese
and Replace the word
Japan
Malaysia
in the year 2010.
Overall
, it is clear that
there are great discrepancies between these two country people on what they spent on.
As illustrated, most of the expenditures in Japan was
made on goods and other services, Correct subject-verb agreement
were
contain
29% of the total expenditures compared to Wrong verb form
containing
Malaysia
, which only spends 26%. Food came as second
Add an article
the second
priority
for both countries with 24% and 27% of the total household costs respectively. Housing in Japan is placed as the third
priority
with an average of 21% expenditure compare
to Wrong verb form
compared
Malaysia
, which places their
housing Correct pronoun usage
apply
their
major expenditure.
Moving on, money spent Change preposition
as their
for
transportation fall as the fourth Change preposition
on
priority
with an average of 20% in Japan and 10% in Malaysia
.
Finally
, healthcare was observed to be the least priority
for both countries include
6% and 3% of the total expenditures.Wrong verb form
including
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