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In conclusion, although many reasons such as the use of plastic packaging materials and over consumerism contribute towards the increase in waste production, the government can reduce this growing problem by implementing stringent laws and by promoting recycling.

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Excessive
production
 of waste is an issue we face today. In order to tackle
this
 menace it is important to identify its cause. Consumerism is the number one cause of the excessive
production
 of garbage. Markets are getting flooded with cheap low quality products. They don’t
last
 very long. People buy them,
use
 them for a few weeks or months and
then
 throw them away. Eventually, these end up in landfills. Growing consumerism is
also
 responsible for mindless shopping. People buy products they do not even need and once those products start collecting dust, they are
also
 thrown away. Many of these products cannot even be recycled.
Consequently
, they lie in the landfills polluting the environment. Excessive
use
 of
plastic
also
 contributes to the growing
production
 of rubbish. We go shopping empty handed and bring home the purchase in
plastic
 carry bags. Food is often served on
plastic
 plates during community celebrations and functions. Some even restaurants
use
plastic
 cutlery. E-waste is another problem that confronts us today. People no longer get a broken television or mobile phone repaired.
Instead they
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Instead, they
 buy a brand new piece. Some people discard their smart phones or laptops in working condition as soon as a new model hits the market. They are neither concerned, nor aware of the impact of their actions on the environment. In order to deal with the growing
production
 of garbage, the government should enact some stringent laws. It should make recycling mandatory. It should
also
 ban the
use
 of
plastic
 and impose heavy taxes on consumer goods like mobile phones to reduce their sales. Another way the government can fight
this
 menace is to create awareness among the public. If people realize that they are knowingly or unknowingly hurting the planet by throwing away stuff, they will definitely want to change their habits.
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