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Some say that people living in high-rise apartments are lonely and unhappy, while others say that it’s advantageous to stay in high-rise apartments. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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According to some, people are lonely and sad in the
skyscrapers but
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skyscrapers, but
 others find it to be beneficial to live thereof.
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 there exist strong arguments on both sides, living in a high-rise apartment is
meritable
being in demand by especially employers
marketable
, I think. From one angle, some people think they feel frustrated, alone and dismal in the
collosal
so great in size or force or extent as to elicit awe
colossal
accomodations
making or becoming suitable; adjusting to circumstances
accommodations
. According to them, living in
such
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 places is tedious as well. Since it is said to make one lazy and
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life
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live
 in high-rise
accomodations
making or becoming suitable; adjusting to circumstances
accommodations
accommodation
 is structured and the same all the time.
Furthermore
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, if you live in
such
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 areas you are always with street noises and the fumes which is produced by cars or buses have, in turn, knock-on effects on the organisms of people. On top of that, skyscrapers are sometimes perilous in cases of natural
diases
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
disease
dishes
doses
 and it is quite impossible to remain alive or even to save lives!
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, some people claim that living in high-rise apartments are fabulous. It
supply
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supplies
 you with a number of of significance merits. I
aslo
in addition
also
 think that it is advantageous to live in high buildings for the reason that skyscrapers are the token of progress and modernism. They are ways of
life
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. They form stunning cities, where many people are moving in, to supply us with new
life
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 and development. Living in high-rise apartments is very comfortable and
convinient
suited to your comfort or purpose or needs
convenient
.
Such
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accomodations
making or becoming suitable; adjusting to circumstances
accommodations
 include all the amenities which can't be found in the countryside or elsewhere. To conclude, there are many supporters of these both arguments.
However
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, I think living in high-rise apartments are
meritable
being in demand by especially employers
marketable
. Since it gives you many opportunities of new
life
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 and the very comfort you need.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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