The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in 1999.

The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in 1999.
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The chart illustrates the number of
visitors
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who visited four different types of popular
attraction
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attractions
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places like theme parks, Museums, Galleries, Historic Houses and Monuments, and Wildlife
park
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parks
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and Zoos in Britain in 1999.
Overall
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,
visitors
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were mostly attracted to the Theme parks
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, museums
where
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were
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their
second
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-best destination to visit. Meanwhile, historic houses and monuments, and wildlife were visited by
few
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a few
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.
To begin
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with, the theme park was the most
attracted
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designation where people experienced five different things, including the Blackpool pleasure beach
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47% of people were spotted visiting,
however
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, adventures and Legoland, Windsor, have the same number of
visitors
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(10% each) which was lower than the Pleasure land, Southport Chessington World of Adventures and Alton towers which were 16% and 17% respectively.
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, more than one-
third
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(37%) percentage of people visited
the
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Museums and Galleries
whereas
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Wildlife
park
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parks
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and Zoos had fewer
visitors
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to
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9%. Historic Houses and monuments were popular places to explore,
although
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, few visited them
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apply
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16%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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