For many, Shopping malls are great places to spend their leisure time and meet others. People however in the past mostly visited those when necessary.

The shopping complex is a great location to utilize their free
time
and get together with others. People
however in
Accept comma addition
however, in
the earlier principally visited those when obligatory. I believe that shopping has become an old trend, spending too much
time
at malls is putting adverse affect mostly on the young generations, education and health as well.
To begin
with, it is fact that in the modern era, most of the people spend their
time
at shopping plazas rather than the past. As if the young ones are being attracted by these places. Mostly they are interested to skip their classes to meet friends at malls and give the
first
preference to eat junk food like pizza, burger, sandwiches and so on.
As a result
, it puts bad hazards on the healthy life.
Moreover
,
although
there are various of products can be purchased by the consumers under a single roof like beauty products, kitchen appliance, kind of fruits and vegetables as well as a number of facilities are provided by the malls like air conditioners, escalators, movie theatres, kid's and food corners. So, it has become a
first
preference to spend their
time
on it as compared to open places and parks. The portion of these places is started declining due to the malls. It puts a detrimental effect mostly on the younger generation and the rest of the people
also
, because they always keep away from the nature. According to me, fully airy environment gives us energy to do daily chores.
In addition
, people urge to purchase that things which are not necessary, they spend a large amount of their pocket money as a consequence these types of expenditure put them in debt. As well, at the end of season, huge discounts are provided by different brands on their products. I think, they have more profit in
this
than consumers because it increased their business. They do fraud with people owing to they can not manage their budget. To conclude, there are more negative effects on people's life as they become more consumptive. So people should spend their precious
time
at airy places rather than shopping complexes and used these areas only to pick up essential commodities.

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