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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge

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Education is an essential part of every children.
However
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, in some nations in Europe few children from the age of 11 to 13 commutes to
school
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 to
study
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 more practical skills which assist them to obtain a job, others focus more on academics. I am of the opinion that, academic
study
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 is more vital than any other at
school
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 level. According to European people, they think that children have been ready for
further
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 opportunities,
as a result
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, they teach them real knowledge which help them in future jobs, to contradict it, I reckon
this
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 kind of
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 is essential but not at
school
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 age, where kids need more attention on academics.
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, in
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 when they bestow more time in class
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,
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 they will become a connoisseur in mathematics, science etc. Which plays an indispensable role when they will become a working professional. I suggest,
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, each
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 must focus on academic
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 only, as we found it is very important to them.
Secondly
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, they can teach them vocational knowledge after 10th standard where children are fully educated with the basic skills.
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, if you try to teach both before 10th class,
then
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 the pupils may confuse with it.
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, my own son who is in 7th standard and I enrolled him to "machine learning" classes. As a consequence, with
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 and class
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study he
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study, he
 is unable to focus either academics or extra classes. To recapitulate, I repeat that providing practical knowledge about the job is required, but it needs a specific
school
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 level of children.
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