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Crime rate , in most countries ,is often higher in urban areas than in rural areas. Why you thik that is ? Give solution to reduce this crime.

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The rate of crime has shown a northward movement all over the world.
However
, in the majority of nations, the crime rate is more in cities than countryside areas.Though, there are multiple reasons responsible for
this
 phenomenon. I feel unemployment and
drug
 abuse are the most common reason.
This
 essay intends to discuss these reasons, though briefly, and set of solution is suggested to curb
this
 grave concern. Unemployment is considered as the main reason of growing crimes in favoured parts of the country.In these days, cities have become overpopulated. Even worse, people who live in backward areas are migrating to these areas in the expectation of higher remuneration for their work.
Conversely
, owing to a large number of people; these regions are unable to provide work to all people.
As a result
, people commit illegal activities for earning their livelihood.
Besides
, a vast number of cities' people are
drug
 addicted. Urban areas are being chosen by
drug
 dealer for smuggling as here they can target a large number of people.
Therefore
, for satisfaction their
drug
 requirements, masses involve themselves in various crimes
such
 as burglary, murder and many more. Like, every key to lock,
this
 problem, too, has numerous feasible solutions. Government needs to generate ample job opportunities.To cite an example, establishing new business policies which aid unemployed to commence a business. Another way is, setting of a stringent sentence for the culprits by judicial law. Since, it will work as a lesson for criminals and others.
Moreover
, rehabilitation should be provided to criminals in prisons.
Last
 but not the least, welfare campaigns should be conducted which attuned to people about the ill - effects of
drug
 addiction. In conclusion, I believe,
although
 lack of jobs as well as drugs are reasons behind
this
 issue; certain actions
such
 as employment policy, strict punishments and awareness among people will help to tackle
this
 problem.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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