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More and more people today are drinking sugar-based drinks. What are the reasons for this? What are the solutions?

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Nowadays, a
lot
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 of people tend to drink beverages with a
lot
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 of
sugar
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. In
this
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 essay i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
will discuss the reasons of
this
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 trend and give solutions for
this
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. Nowadays, in every shopping c
enters we
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centre, we
centre we
can see a plenty of delicious beverages. Their taste d
iffer
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differs
from each other as their l
ookings.
a feeling of pleasure and enjoyment
likings
 They are very tasty that people w
ants
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want
to drink them every day or with their food. But these drinkings consist a
lot
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 of
sugar
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, so d
rinking
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drunk
a
lot
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 people can harm their
health
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. In
such
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 delicious beverages have not only
sugar
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, but
also
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 a
nother
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
chemical components
that is
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 not good for
health
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.
For example
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, famous drinkings
such
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 as coca cola, p
epsi,
Pepsi Cola is a trademarked cola
Pepsi
 7up are very tasty, but o
verdrinking
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them can cause to stomach or a
nother
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
health
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 problems.  F
or
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To
solve
this
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 problem, there are some solutions for
this
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 trend.
Firstly
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, companies should replace
sugar
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 and a
nother
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
chemical a
ddings
a public promotion of some product or service
ads
with natural, tasty, fresh fruit juices.
For instance
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, for fruit juices producers can add j
uices
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Juices
of another strong-taste natural s
yrops
a thick sweet sticky liquid
syrups
syrup
instead
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 of
sugar
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.
Secondly
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, people should realize the harm of the
sugar
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 based drinkings and reduce the consumption of them.
Also
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, in the weddings, p
arties
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party
people can put t
o
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on
the table fresh fruit juices
instead
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 of harmful ones. In conclusion, people regularly should reduce the consuming of
such
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 drinkings and
also
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 producers must think about the public
health
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 and produce something beneficial not the harmful
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