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Thechart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words

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The chart shows the
houres
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 of free
time
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 available from
women
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 and
men
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, in a typical
week
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 of the working year 2009/2010. People are: employed for full
time
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 or part
time
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, unemployed, retired and housewives. As shown in the graph, there aren’t
men
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 with a part-
time
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 contract and
also
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 housewives are only
women
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.
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, there are some similar data for the
houres
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 of leisure
time
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 that interest both unemployed
men
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 and retired ones. In fact, they have around 80
houres
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 of leisure
time
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 during a
week
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.
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, famale data in the ranges already mentioned is between 70 and 80
houres
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 per
week
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. That’s why, obviously, people without a job have more free
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 available.
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, people with a full
time
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 contract have the least amount of free
houres
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 in a
week
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, those are around 50 for
men
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 and less than 40 for
women
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. Exactly 40
houres
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 per
week
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 are available for females employed part
time
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. As a conclusion, the presented graphic illustrates that:
men
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 always have more leisure
time
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 than
women
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, and no one has a part
time
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 contract. Only woman are housewives, and for the ones who have a job, the most they work, the least they have free
time
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.
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