What are the pros and cons for children of watching TV?

Since the introduction of
tv
there has been
significant changeover
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a significant changeover
in the life of
human being
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a human being
.
Although
it leaves some drawback compared to advantages, there is no doubt that watching
box
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boxing
of
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on
screen brought plenty of benefits for children. From my point of view every coin has two sides, so do
this
lovely activity of many people. Yet, the beneficial sides of watching
tv
overshadow any disadvantages.
First
of all, not every child has an opportunity for gaining
wide range
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a wide range
of educational knowledge. On
this
occasion more and more children tend to replace
this
chance by getting educated in front
tv
. No surprise that it is one of the most important beneficial sides of
this
activity. Mainly because, now there are lots of educational television programs like language learning or couch surfing who suffers with lack of chances to do these. At the same it leads to another advantage called snapping out of emotional barrier. More accurately the more kids watch cognitive
tv
programs the more they get open-minded, and it is a perfect characteristic
for
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of
future life
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the future life
a future life
of
child
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a child
the child
. On the other side of
argument
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an argument
the argument
, it is often said that spending a lot of time in front of
television
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the television
may cause impairment of action called metabolism. Take physical inactivity as an example, pay deep attention to winding
streets they
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streets, they
are empty, what I mean by
that is
more and more children get addicted to blue screen nowadays.
Eventually it
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Eventually, it
will
cause obtaining
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cause, obtaining
more weight or disease like obesity. Losing contact with
real world
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the real world
is
another but
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another, but
not
less important disadvantage
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the less important disadvantage
of watching
tv
. Because of
misusing
not able to be found
missing
this
activity majority of children today are losing their connection with family or society. All
thing
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things
considered,
tv
has already become a vital part of our life. And broadcasting wide variety
tv
programs is spreading and sharing
pay-off
the final payment of a debt
payoff
educational and cultural knowledge. Yet, still there is an argument that it has
much
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many
more drawbacks than benefits.
Personally I
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Personally, I
believe it is just an item on the hands of
human
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humans
a human
, and it has tons of advantages in comparison with
drawback
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a drawback
drawbacks
.

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