Nowadays children has become more addicted to TV and because of that their physical activity level is decreasing. what can be cause and possible solution to that ?

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spend
ost of their
time
in front of blue screen called television. And it is often said that youngsters have already become the main viewer of world screen in comparison to twenty years before. To be more pr
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precise, they
re getting less active in a fast-changing world because of over watching TV. And still there is a question what can be ca
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the majority
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does not want
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Therefore, they
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time
to get addicted to TV. Another thing that has been causing children’s inactivity for two or three decades is illiteracy and indifference of their parents. How someone can teach if he or she does not know how to avoid
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manner of acting or controlling yourself
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erself or himself. Judging twenty-
first
century technology almost every single thing can be considered as a solution.
First
of all we have to learn not to limit ourselves
instead
we must think ahead for a bright future. Schools should lu
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set up or found
launch
special
time
management program for both child and family so that they can avoid or tackle these problems like inactivity or over watching TV.
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ost of today's children are facing mass problem like being inactive because of addiction to television rather than in the past. And it is
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is a widely held view
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