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The deadly coronavirus COVID-19 has spread to at least 69 countries, affecting all aspects of life. As part of its disastrous influence, Vietnamese schools at all levels have been closed for more than a month. There is a common argument that children should be allowed to go back to school for the sake of themselves, their family and the whole society. How far do you agree with this opinion? Your essay should be at least 250 words in length.

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It seems apparent that spreading the SARS-CoV2 virus "without borders" is an alarming problem affecting many facets of life. Vietnam is
also
 a country affected by
this
 virus, and the government has granted all schools at all levels a break for more than 1 month.
It
Suggestion
It's
 widely believed that schools should welcome students back because of the advantages of themselves and related parties. To my ways of thinking, students should be at
home
 to defend their health and diminish the spread in public. On the one hand, mortal
coronavirus
 has the ability to spread swiftly. If schools allow students to return to school, the number of infected cases will boost exponentially because of the large number of students in a class. In fact, that in Korea and Japan, due to
subjectivity
Suggestion
the subjectivity
 and permission students going to school, the number of infections in these countries
have become
Suggestion
has become
 shocking data in recent days.
Therefore
, leaving students at
home
 is a necessary method during
this
 period.
On the other hand
, children cannot afford to protect themselves most safely from the epidemic.
For instance
, they usually tend to throw their masks when they feel hot or washing hands rapidly because of giddiness.
Moreover
, scientists indicated that children have weak immune systems, so they are
also
 highly vulnerable to infection.
Thus
, students should be self-
isolation
Suggestion
isolated
 at
home
 so that they are taken care of and protected their heath until the disease tends to go down and the vaccine is found. In conclusion, despite some people’s view that schools should allow students to go back to school, I tend to think students had better stay at
home
 to safeguard their health as well as avoid booming infection in the whole community.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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