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Some people think that the government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children,while other think it is the fault of the parents . Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Obesity
 is the major
concern we
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concern, we
 face today.
some
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Some
 people think that the
government
 is responsible for the rise in
obesity
 while others argue that parents are responsible for
this
.In
this
 essay I will discuss both sides.
To begin
with it
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with, it
 is true that the
government
 could have taken preventive measures to control
obesity
 in children.The
government
 could pass regulations that require
food
 companies to produce chocolates
,
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,
cheese and chips with more nutrients.These regulations will force companies to sell their
food
 products at higher prices.
This
 in turn will reduce their consumption and when consumption of junk foods decreases
,
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,
incidents of
obesity
 will
also
 decrease.The
government
 should organize
gymnasiam
athletic facility equipped for sports or physical training
gymnasium
 for physical exercise. On the flip side many parents work long hours and they have no time for their adolescent
.
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.
They must find the time to cook proper meals for their offspring. Parents should educate their children about healthy
food
 and told them about
nutritional value
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the nutritional value
 of hygienic
food
. To
recaptulate
summarize briefly
recapitulate
,
government
 and parents should play
vital role
Suggestion
a vital role
 to reduce the
obesity
 level in teenagers. The
Government
 should organise sport complex in all the cities and parents should motivate their children about sports and healthy eatings.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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