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In some counties it is though advisable that children begin formal education at four years old, while in others they do not have to start school until they are seven or eight. How far do you agree with either of these views?

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The age of children entering the
school
 changes considerably depending on where they have
born
Suggestion
borne
. In some parts of the world they start schooling at the age of four, in some others they enrol
to
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in
school
 at seven or eight years old. Even though each culture and tradition are different and respectable, I put myself in a middle way between these two views. The brain of the children is far more capable of learning and making connections in
early years
Suggestion
the early years
 than later in life. Because of the elasticity of the brain, children can learn fast and, in
this
 period, they should be encouraged to gain as much knowledge as they can, depending on their capacities.
For example
, it is highly recommended to expose children to more than one language when they are young or play games of logic and math.
Moreover
, children involved
into
Suggestion
in
 learning sooner, they will have more time after the
school
 to figure out their interests and future career.
By contrast
, the brain of children develops
also
 through socialisation, physical and creative activities, which in schools are limited.
In addition
, it may be not easy for children to sit on the chair for the entire day, especially for the most active ones.
As a result
,
school
Suggestion
the school
schools
 can discourage some of them to discover the world with their own body and curiosity. To conclude,
although
 it is true the sooner children go to
school
, the earlier they will mature, it is important to let the children play in the
first
 years of life. In my view, children should go to
school
 at the age of five or six, in which they are mature enough to start learning but they don’t lose the earlier precious time of playing.
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