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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is not doubt that wealth is health, as people consider that it is not possible to live in the materialistic era. Even though all nations have free medical centres for the treatment of clients, yet these are very costly. Because of
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, some people are not obtained as well as current machinery is not located in the hospitals. I strongly agree with the statement. There are many reasons for
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 phenomenon. I will examine the both causes and add my opinion before any specific conclusion in the upcoming paragraphs.The presented map gives the information about Bell hill farms and changes that took place in the years between 1976 and 2006. It is clear that in 1976 there was a Bell hill farm available in the North side, which was converted into an environment centre in 2006.
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, the farmyard located in the middle of the path. It demolished and built the recreational area in 2006.
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, storage for the machinery and barn had existed in the North sector was developed into with parking and a multimedia room at the end of the period. Moving ahead, in the southeast sections, cow sheds and poultry farm were there in 1976. After the three decades, it transformed into student housing in the east part.What's more, roads presented in the east part had remained stable over the period.
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, farmhouse remained same throughout the both years. In overview, it can be seen that there were many changes during the period in bill hill farm, which became an environment centre at the end of term.

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