Gone are the days when children dreamed of becoming doctors and nurses – today’s children want to become YouTubers or vloggers. According to a survey of 1,000 children aged six to 17, more than three quarters of them say they’d consider a career in online videos. (Adapted from --DELETED LINK-- It is dangerous for kids to aspire to become a YouTube sensation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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It is true that young
children
fantasized about becoming doctors, nurses and teachers whereas
today’s
they desire to become renowned YouTubers or vloggers. Change noun form
today
In a
research showed that more than Change preposition
A
three quarters
of 1,000 Add a hyphen
three-quarters
children
aged six to 17 say they want to follow a job in online videos
. Some people argue that
is
is hazardous for them to do that. In my opinion, I partly agree with Correct your spelling
it
this
view and will explain reasons
in my essay.
On the one hand, I’m convinced that becoming a Correct article usage
the reasons
YouTuber
or vlogger brings children
a variety of benefits. It promotes children
's creativity and helps children
promote many skills in life. For example
, when creating a compelling video, we need to invest a lot
in it and speaking skills are also
important to get a lot
of views. Therefore
, To become a well-known YouTuber
, children
need to absorb a lot
of factors and then
when they are famous ,they have many outstanding sides. YouTuber
is an entertainment tool, but it helps children
make a lot
of money when creating videos
with thousands of views. This
can help their parents with their expenses.
On the other hand
, I also
believe that being a Youtuber
can bring detrimental effects to Correct your spelling
YouTuber
children
. On YouTube, the videos
are very diverse, including potentially objectionable and negative videos
. When children
watch a variety of videos
on
it can cause them to learn from bad things and do something dangerous to their loved ones. Change preposition
apply
For example
, when watching a video troll who by fire or gasoline, they feel interesting
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interested
about
it, suddenly it is the same action to make others laugh and feel excited. Change preposition
in
As a result
, They will be able to change in the negative direction and create threating
actions which we cannot imagine.
In conclusion, I believe that becoming Correct your spelling
threatening
Correct article usage
a Youtubers
Youtubers
orCorrect your spelling
YouTubers
vloggers
Fix the agreement mistake
vlogger
have
both sides. Correct subject-verb agreement
has
Children
should know what is good to do and what is bad to avoid.Submitted by nguyenthuhien1999hn on
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