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The diagram below shows two different processes for manufacturing black tea

The diagram below shows two different processes for manufacturing black tea
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The given diagram shows the various processes for black
tea
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producing
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 and illustrates it step by step. It
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is obviously
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obviously
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 that black
tea
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 might be obtained through two methods. They consist of traditional and modern methods.
At
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 the beginning, fresh
tea
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 leaves are collected
according to
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needed
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the needed
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 quality of
tea
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. If we need good quality
tea
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, only bud and 2 top leaves are picked. Afterwards,
withering
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the withering
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process
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 is
being
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implemented,
as
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 the result, 60% of moisture
are
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 going out.
Then
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, regarding
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which method we want to use the
process
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 of rolling or cutting occurs. Evidently, after the
fast cutting
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process
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 smaller granular pieces of
tea
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 leaves are
being
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created.
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, by rolling the leaves we are disposing of enzymes and get flat and broken leaves. Afterwards, by means of the oxidation
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 leaves alter their colour to copper in the presence of air and enzymes. In the end, the leaves are
being
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dried in hot air dryers and 97% of
moisture
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the moisture
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vaporizing
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. During
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this
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 they spread flavour and aroma. On the whole, the
process
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 of getting black
tea
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 doesn't complex. Even if
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process
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the process
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 has 4
stage
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 mass-production of
tea
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 isn't supposed to be easy.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, process with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traditional method
  • CTC method
  • Manufacturing process
  • Withering
  • Rolling
  • Fermentation
  • Drying
  • Sorting
  • Crushing
  • Tearing
  • Curling
  • Quality
  • Flavor
  • Aroma
  • Technology advancements
  • Environmental considerations
  • Consumer preference
  • Pricing
  • Tea grade categorization
  • Market implications
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