the diagram below shows two different processes for manufacturing black tea

the diagram below shows two different processes for manufacturing black tea
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The diagram shows the two processes for manufacturing black
tea
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. The traditional way is used for making loose
tea
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and
modern
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the modern
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process is ideal for
tea
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bags. When collecting
tea
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, the
tea
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picker picks only the two top leaves and the bud of ensuring a
high quality
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tea
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.
Then
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, the
tea
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leaves go through withering, where leaves are spread out and
air
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the air
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is passed through withering, where leaves are spread out and
air
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the air
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is passed through them to remove up to 60
percent
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of their moisture. After that, the leaves are ready for rolling or cutting. Factories use traditional methods of rolling and crushing or faster modern methods of cutting, tearing and curling to make
tea
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bags. In both processes, natural enzymes are produced from the leaves.
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next
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step is oxidation, where the enzymes from the leaves mix with the air.
This
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changes the colour of the leaves from green to copper and creates a nice flavour and aroma.
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, the leaves are fired and dried. By
this
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stage, little moisture remains in the
tea
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-just three
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tea with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traditional method
  • CTC method
  • Manufacturing process
  • Withering
  • Rolling
  • Fermentation
  • Drying
  • Sorting
  • Crushing
  • Tearing
  • Curling
  • Quality
  • Flavor
  • Aroma
  • Technology advancements
  • Environmental considerations
  • Consumer preference
  • Pricing
  • Tea grade categorization
  • Market implications
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