The diagram below shows two different processes for manufacturing black tea. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature. and make the comparison where relevant.

The diagram below shows two different processes for manufacturing black tea. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature. and make the comparison where relevant.
The diagram illustrates two
kind
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processes
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of processes
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to produce black
tea
.
While
the
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black
tea
results from
a
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several
step
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in one direction, the firing is the end system to lose the moisture. In the first stage, the farmers
picking
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fresh
tea
leaves when the good qualities become from only
bud
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the bud
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and two top leaves Afterwards, the withering process
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leaves the whole on
rack
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the rack
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by
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60% moisture out. The
next
process separates in traditional method to generate loose
tea
and
modern
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the modern
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method to create
tea
bags. The traditional technique leaves rolled flat and broken with followed by the release of enzymes from them.
In contrast
,
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the modern technique
that
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leaves
cut
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, torn, and curled to create
the
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smaller granular pieces.
Moreover
,
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both
of
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the
process
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will become the instep of oxidation with the rolled leaves on the tiles or cement, so that leaves change to copper colour by combining enzymes with air. In the final step, the crucial part in
oven
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the oven
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and get
result
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the result
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by moisture out at 97% and the other side released flavour with aroma from them
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • withering
  • moisture content
  • pliable
  • rolling
  • twists
  • breaks up the cells
  • releasing enzymes
  • machine cutting
  • fermentation
  • oxidation
  • heating
  • drying and packaging
  • machinery
  • efficient
  • traditional methods
  • modern methods
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