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Transport delays and long journey times are a widespread phenomenon in many cities today. What are the causes of this problem and how could the situation be improved

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Nowadays, commuting or going to somewhere by
transport
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 in cities and even in conurbations is taking very excessive time from people causing many problems. There are some fundamental reasons for
this
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, as well as solutions which may prevent them. Perhaps, the most fundamental reason for it may be
excessive populatio
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an excessive population
excessive population
 in cities which is endangering
proble
a state of difficulty that needs to be resolved
problem
 of overcrowding. Because if there are too many pedestrians
in
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on
streets
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the streets
, they can cause
interruption
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interruptions
an interruption
 to
transport
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 movements.
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, nowadays in urban areas, there are so many
bottenecks
a narrowing that reduces the flow through a channel
bottlenecks
 that tremendous congestions are being caused by them. And
this
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 problem is
degendering
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 mental as well as environmental problems as too many cars get stuck in
congestons
excessive accumulation of blood or other fluid in a body part
congestion
, producing damaging emission.
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, one of many reasons for it may be the
ignirance
the lack of knowledge or education
ignorance
 of pedestrians in all cities who do not obey rules of
transport
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 movements ignoring them. The best solution for these problems may be that
authorities
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the authorities
 should expand roads rectifying the problem of bottlenecks in cities. If roads are wide enough so that cars have enough space, even small congestions may be
oblierated
reduced to nothingness
obliterated
.
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, governments should encourage their city-dwellers to use more public
transport
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 convincing them that it is the most cost-effective way to commit or to go to somewhere. Because people use public
transport
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 more
instead
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 of purchasing their private cars, less
congestions
Suggestion
congestion
 there will be. To conclude, I feel that if
government
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the government
 use these methods as a solution, they may overcome that problem.
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