You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask your friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter : Give details of your study plan Explain why you want to take up the part time job Suggest how your friend could help you find a job
Dear Harman,
Hope
this
letter finds you in good health.My concern is to write this
letter to need your assistance in for searching a part-time job in Scarborough.Actually,I got my study visa last
Sunday and this
news was also
shared with you immediately.
Moreover
,I have a three-day study curriculum in the week and the rest of the days,I will be free at home.Then
,I decided to acquire a job with your help as living expenses are too high,which are not manageable merely with GIC.Therefore
,it is mandatory for me to secure a part-time for my living standard.
I need your help with this
situation as you have been living there for six years.Also
,you know how to apply to obtain a job.I would be grateful if you would apply online for me according to
your experience.Hence
,I will get an interview after my arrival ,which will be on next Sunday.
Hope so you will assist me with your valuable experience.
Yours Sincerely,
Kamal.Submitted by kamalkaur.er on
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coherence cohesion
The language used throughout the letter is clear and straightforward. However, try to avoid repetition. For instance, the phrase 'I need your help with this situation' could be rephrased to avoid redundancy and enhance readability.
task achievement
Your request for help is clear, polite, and fits well within the context of writing to a friend, which shows a suitable writing tone.
task achievement
While your reasons for seeking a part-time job are clear, you could enhance your response by providing more specific details regarding your study plan and how the part-time job will fit into your schedule.
coherence cohesion
The closing of the letter is appropriate and maintains a polite tone, which is suitable for the context of writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
The letter includes a clear greeting that sets the tone for the message and closes appropriately, maintaining a consistent and polite tone throughout.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite