Healthcare should not be provided for free regardless of a person's income. The health of an individual is in their own hands. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Health

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is Wealth" - It is precisely said by someone that

Health

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is the real wealth and Healthcare is

one

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of the biggest pillars of the

society

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. It is

beleived

accept as true; take to be true

believed

by a fraction of people that Healthcare facilities should not be provided free to the people regardless of what they earn or contribute to the

society

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. They should be responsible for their own

health

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and well being. I am not in favour of

this

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thing facilities like Healthcare should be provided by the government for free.

Although

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one

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should take care of his own

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health but

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health, but

there

are

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some section of the

society

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who can'

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afford

such

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high

maintaince

activity involved in maintaining something in good working order

maintenance

maintains

mountains

health

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facilties

a building or place that provides a particular service or is used for a particular industry

facilities

faculties

. On the

first

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facet, Healthcare is something

that is

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right of each and every being on the

this

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planet. It should be provided free to

eveyone

all people

everyone

as many

one

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them can'

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even afford

such

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healthcare

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health care

. If someone is

healthy

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healthy, then

then

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only he/she can contribute to the

society

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. People pay tax according to what they earn for their living and

this

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tax is used for facilities like healthcare.

Construction

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The construction

governments

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government

hospitals should be

one

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of the main agenda of a

society

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so that regardless of age, colour, sex,

status etc

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status, etc.

status etc.

one

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should be treated equally and that too free of cost.

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, it is somewhat true that

healthcare

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health care

is in everyone's own

hands but

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hands, but

there are circumstances where people can'

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look after their

health

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. People who work in offices don'

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have much time

too

in the direction of

concentrate

Suggestion

health

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and going to fitness centres.

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centres are not only expensive, but

also

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time consuming. The pressure of work is at the zenith and all the time

work

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the work

is on their mind. On the other side, people who

don

do not

don't

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earn much not are even

deprieved

marked by deprivation especially of the necessities of life or healthful environmental influences

deprived

of a balanced diet. If Healthcare would be free and

then

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and only they will be able to survive

such

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hard conditions. To sum up, Healthcare should be accessible to each and everyone as it can

also

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effect

have an effect upon

affect

the economy of a country. If Economy will

plummet

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plummet, then

then

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people

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the people

of the country will come to extinction and

eveything

all things

everything

will collapse

vigoursly

with vigor; in a vigorous manner

vigorously

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Healthcare should not be provided for free regardless of a person's income. The health of an individual is in their own hands. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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In many societies, there is a growing emphasis on individualism, with people prioritizing their personal goals and desires over collective interests. Is this is a positive or negative development?