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the changing rates of crime in the inner city from 2003 to 2012

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The line graph illustrates how the
number
 of criminal cases by type of burglary, car theft and robbery in the urban areas changed between the years of 2003 and 2012.
Overall
, the ratio of burglary cases decreased significantly in the period given,
while
 the
number
 of car theft and robbery incidents almost remained stable with fluctuations. It can clearly be seen from the graph that the
number
 of car theft
offenses
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 declined substantially from 2800 to 2100 between the years
of
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2005 and 2006, and after
that
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 it started to rise until the year of 2012
,
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 when it reached
to
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2800 again.
Also
, the
number
 of robbery cases stayed constant at 600 with minor oscillations which were between 900 and 500 during the period.
Although
 the rates of burglary crimes had a slight increase of 350 in the first year of
period
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, it experienced a dramatic fall from 3750 to 1150 between the years
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2004 and 2008. Afterwards, it climbed to 1400 till the year of 2012 with minor fluctuations.

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