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In order to study at university students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford them so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. To what extent do you agree?

#study #university #students #tuition #fees #people #education
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 for higher
education
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 are expensive and not affordable for everyone so
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 some
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university
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 should be free for all
people
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, regardless of their background. In my opinion, offering everyone
free
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university
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education
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 would be problematic and,
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, should only be offered to certain individuals. Having
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university
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education
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 for everyone would put a tremendous financial strain on a country. Universities would have no income from
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 and,
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, they would rely completely on the state for funding. Doing
this
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 means taking funds from other
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 areas,
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 as the health system, in order to allocate money to universities. For the majority of countries, particularly developing and underdeveloped countries,
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 would not be a financially viable option. Another point to consider is that offering all
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 free tertiary
education
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 would tempt many
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 to enter
university
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 whether they were interested or not.
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, rather than choosing to get a job, some young
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 would opt for
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a degree to which they would only half-heartedly apply themselves.
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 would not only be a waste of a country’s finances but
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 a waste of human resources.
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, the best solution would be to keep
university
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fees
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 but still offer some free places to gifted students from poor backgrounds.
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 would ensure that talented, intelligent students who cannot afford to pay for higher
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 would still get educated and trained.
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, society would benefit by getting the right
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 trained and valuable financial resources would not be wasted. In conclusion, abolishing
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fees
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 is not feasible for most countries but offering free places to particular students who have limited financial means is a much better use of a country’s resources.
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  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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