The graph below gives information on the population of turtles in India from 1980 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information on the population of turtles in India from 1980 to 2012. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph gives data on different
turtle
species
in
India
between 1980 and 2012. The given
turtle
population
index
clearly states that leatherback
turtles
greatly reduced during the given period
while
the Olive Ridley
species
managed to increase their
population
in
India
. Analysing the illustration
reveal
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that there were 111
turtle
species
in
India
and the 1980
turtle
population
index
considered 100
units
and
in
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this
year, all
turtles
in
India
were at unit 100.
However
, over
the
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time, leatherback
turtle
’s number dropped significantly and reached
to
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only 60
units
while
an opposite trend could be observed in the case of Olive Ridley
turtles
.
This
species
continually expanded,
according to
the
index
, till 1997 and
then
showed some fluctuations with a sharp drop in 2012 when it was just over 120
units
.
Finally
, the green
turtle
’s
index
indicates that a rapid oscillation was visible in the
population
of
this
turtle
. Over the years,
this
species's
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population
,
however
, slightly dropped and they were just over 90
units
in 2012. The
index
of all
turtle
species
did not change significantly, though there were many ups and downs in
this
number. The important information that the diagram provides is the number of various types of
turtle
species
. It was 19 for leatherback
turtles
, 38 for green
turtles
and 20 for Olive Ridley.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words turtle, species, india, population, index, turtles, units with synonyms.
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