The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart gives information about the percentage of multiple social network
sites
what
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used by
the
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Canadians
in
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between 2014 and 2015.
Overall
, most people used one
sites
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in both years. If we go to the five
sites
we can clearly see a gradual decline
to
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percentage
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the percentage
a percentage
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of
users
.
furthermore
number
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a number
the number
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of
one site
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one-site
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users
fell,
however
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the number
users
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of users
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used
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who used
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multiple
sites
rose in the year
On the other
hand
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the percentage of people to
no
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not
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used any site got down to 21% from 22% in a year,
however
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,however
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the single site
users
experienced to
downward
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a downward
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trend and they downed to 28% from 36%. Inversely
number
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a number
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of multiple
sites
users
indicated an upward trend
for instance
, two
sites
users
rose from 23% to 24%, three
sites
users
increase to 16% from 12% with
similar
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a similar
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incline, four
sites
users
with a 3 % increase to 8% from 5% and five
sites
users
rose to 4% from 2% with double the increase.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sites, users with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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