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The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart gives information about the percentage of multiple social network
sites
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what
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apply
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used by
the
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apply
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Canadians
in
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apply
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between 2014 and 2015.
Overall
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, most people used one
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sites
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site
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 in both years. If we go to the five
sites
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 we can clearly see a gradual decline
to
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in
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percentage
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the percentage
a percentage
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 of
users
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.
furthermore
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number
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a number
the number
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 of
one site
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one-site
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users
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 fell,
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however
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 the number
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users
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of users
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used
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who used
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 multiple
sites
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 rose in the year
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hand
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 the percentage of people to
no
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not
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 used any site got down to 21% from 22% in a year,
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however
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,however
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 the single site
users
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 experienced to
downward
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a downward
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 trend and they downed to 28% from 36%. Inversely
number
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a number
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 of multiple
sites
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users
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 indicated an upward trend
for instance
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, two
sites
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users
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 rose from 23% to 24%, three
sites
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users
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 increase to 16% from 12% with
similar
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a similar
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 incline, four
sites
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users
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 with a 3 % increase to 8% from 5% and five
sites
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users
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 rose to 4% from 2% with double the increase.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sites, users with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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