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In many countries school have severe with student behavior. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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Firstly
Linking Words
, school differs
upto
Suggestion
whcih
interrogative pronoun, used both substantively and adjectivally, and in direct and indirect questions, to ask for, or refer to, an individual person or thing among several of a class
which
 class it is. Starting from kindergarten, in some countries, it is
upto
Suggestion
 10th standard and in some other countries, it is
upto
Suggestion
up to
 12th standard.
Obvoiusly
Suggestion
Obviously
,
this
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 is the very crucial and
turning point
Suggestion
the turning point
a turning point
 of their life.
Further
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 studies, getting admission into good colleges, all that goes, from which school they have come from and what was their behaviour in the respective schools. Indeed, schooling decides
thier
of them or themselves
their
 future life, what they are going to become. As
such
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, to mould and to make responsible citizens of the country, severe punishments to be there in the schools. Possible causes of the children bad behaviour are, the health and mental condition of the
pregnent
carrying developing offspring within the body or being about to produce new life
pregnant
 women, the family environment, brought up, the society they are living in etc.
to
Suggestion
To
 name the few
.
Accept space
.
 To change the behaviour of a child it is a combined work of
school
Suggestion
the school
 and the parents. Good schools, not only in the children, even can bring some
chnages
cause to change; make different; cause a transformation
changes
 in the parents by parents-teachers meeting, so that parents can have
healthy environment
Suggestion
a healthy environment
 in the house for the up-bringing of the children.
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