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Climate change is an issue. Do you agree with this?

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Introduction
Truth be told, I don't think people in my country do
many
Suggestion
much
 to keep fit, but I can say that some men, especially younger ones, play football not only for keeping fit, but
also
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 for enjoying. People other than younger males generally do
walk
Suggestion
walking
.
Body paragraph 1
It is very important to do physical exercise on a regular basis because it protects both physical and
pyschological
mental or emotional as opposed to physical in nature
psychological
 health.
Body paragraph 2
Some people argue that modern lifestyle is
unhelthy
not in or exhibiting good health in body or mind
unhealthy
 because many people who work are not able to find enough time to relax mentally and do regular exercise that helps us keep healthy.
Body paragraph 3
I think individuals should be responsible of their healths, but governments make efforts
for
Suggestion
in
 keeping their citizens healthy because no government
want
Suggestion
wants
 an unhealthy population.
Body paragraph 4
I think some advertisements can be broadcasted, and in these
advertisement
Suggestion
advertisements
, the benefits of being healthy can be explained because some people are not aware of what they would have if they did maintain
healhty lifestyle
Suggestion
a healthy lifestyle
healthy lifestyle
.
Body paragraph 5
People generally use public transports,
such
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 as metro and busses, and some of them drive their own cars to travel to their works.
Body paragraph 6
There is always traffic congestion on motorways not because of insufficient lanes, but because of
excessive number
Suggestion
the excessive number
 of vehicles.
Body paragraph 7
This
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 traffic problem affects me badly because it takes longer than usual to get to work.
Conclusion
I don't believe
this
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 problem will be solved if some improvements related to motorways are made.
Instead
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 of doing that, the authorities should temp people to use public transports more. The more people use public transports, the less vehicles are on motorways; and
this
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 may lead to less traffic congestion

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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