In many parts of world, children are given more freedom than in the past. Is this a positive or negative development?

There are many advantages of
children
enjoying more freedom. They grow up quicker than their parents did.
This
produces more liberal, mature and adventurous adults, which obviously has an effect on society in the long run.
Today
's
children
follow the global culture, which is the amalgamation of the good points of the various cultures of the world.
Consequently
, countries progress more rapidly because of
this
shedding of many traditional ways of doing things and becoming freer and more open societies.
For example
, in
lndia
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India
, if
today
's youngster wants a
dowry free
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marriage, he will go ahead and have it against all odds,
where as
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earlier youngsters could not take a stand against it as it was considered customary.
Furthermore
,
today
's
children
have the power of the
lnternet
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Internet
and the satellite W in their hands.
Today
's young generation is the most
well informed
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generation than ever in the history of mankind. They know what their parents and grandparents do not know. They have oceans of opportunities in front of them, which they want to explore. They adopt careers of their choice and do not hesitate
walking
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on the untrodden path. They are not afraid of taking risks.
For instance
, earlier
children
were
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by their parents to take up medical, non-medical or commerce streams, but
today
's
children
are going into computer animation, computer gaming and other fields, which were unheard of before.
On the other hand
, sometimes
this
freedom can be detrimental
for
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children
. They like maturity and fail to see the far-reaching consequences of their actions.
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is
also
the time when teens make mistakes and need someone there to guide them
understand
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what went wrong, take a step
backward
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, analyze, and again take a step forward. Freedoms should come in small steps so that the teens are ready to move forward having proven their ability to handle each small movement. Too much freedom can end them in bad company and
also
drugs.

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