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the best way to improve health is to exercise daily. To what extent do you agree.

#health #exercise
Fitness means not lifting weight and gaini
ng fig
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weights
ure and getting six-pack abs, but it is
to
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ABS
abs'
 maintaining stre
ngth level
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maintain
. Fit
body
m
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.
eans that someone tells you that you need to Run 5-km and if you can do it without any gasping
then
 your
body
 called as fit
body
. It is so important in life because if you are doing job and working
for
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a job
the job
 good company
then
 you need to be fit because there are lot of situation
s c
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lots
ome in that you need to do hard work. If yo
u are doi
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the hard work
ng only
workout
 and doing any strength training,
then
 your
workout
 or any training will be wasted because food is most important part of that. There are Three type of sources
prot
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types
ein,
carboh
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source
ydrate, fat in
diet
 if you want to gain strength
then
 yo
u need to inc
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strength, then
rease source of protei
n in y
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sourcing
our
diet
. Carbohydrate is most important p
art of
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the most important part
diet
 because of
that
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the diet
 we get energy. Fat is good for
body
. Some perso
n th
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the body
ink that if yo
u wan
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thinks
t to lose fat
then
 you nee
d to dec
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fat, then
rease fat in your
diet
 but it’s not like that if you want to lose fat
then
 you nee
d to inc
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fat, then
rease ration of protei
n and
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the ration
decrease ratio of carbohydrate. You are doing any
workout
 everyday,
then
 i
f your a
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every day
ge is above 45 you don’t feel that your age because it maintains your
body
 very powerful. Here, I conclude that fitness is very important part of life. If you don’t have time for the gym you can star
t your
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gym, you
workout
 at home because fitness changes your life style your
breathing
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
system everythin
g.
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system, everything

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