The graph below shows the population figures for different types of turtles in India from 1980 to 2012.

The graph below shows the population figures for different types of turtles in India from 1980 to 2012.
The line graph below illustrates the
population
figures
for different
species
of
turtles
over 32 years between 1980 and 2012 in India.
Overall
, the
population
of leatherback
Turtles
has increased over the
period
whereas
green
turtle
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turtles
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and olive ridley
turtles
experienced a decline in their numbers with the latter suffering the most. With regards to individual
species
, leatherback turtle
species
saw a gradual increase in
population
from 100 in 1980 to 140 in 1998 post
which
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and
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their
figures
fluctuated before settling at around 120 by the end of the
period
.
In contrast
,
Although
Olive
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the Olive
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ridley
species
population
fluctuated before rising to 110 in 1997 which was
also
its highest number, it later saw an exactly opposite trend to leatherback and slumped to just around 60 by 2012.
On the other hand
, The
figures
for all the
species
fluctuated over the entire
period
with the final
population
about 5 higher than that in 1980.
Similarly
, green
turtles
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numbers
also
saw a fluctuating trend with the
figures
slipping from 100 in 1980 to 90 by the end of the
period
.

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