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Some people think that it is better for a country’s economy for people to spend money while others believe that it would be better for people to save money. what are the causes and prove some solutions

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Although
 it is sometimes thought that spending
money
 more important for
country's
Suggestion
the country's economy, but
the country's economy but
a country's economy but
economy
 but other people claim that the focus should be on saving
money
. In
this
 essay I will examine the main causes and their solutions.
Our
Suggestion
We
 spent
money
 plays a small part in the
country
's
economy
. In my opinion, the main reason people think spending their
money
 is good for the
country
's
economy
 (different types of taxes). Costumes grow and grow every year. To solve the problem, the state should remove several of them or stop their growth. If
this
 is done, they will probably stop thinking like that. I do not understand what is the use of saving
money
? If people collect
money
 there is no benefit for them or for the government.
It
Suggestion
It's
 better for
economy
 if people spend
money
inside
Suggestion
in
 the
country
 than in
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
country
. If they want us to spend
money
 inside, they should build places for recreation. In conclusion, I believe that people's opinions will change. Because
country's
Suggestion
the country's economy
economy
 does not consist only of the collected
money
 of the people.
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