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Some people think that it is better for a country’s economy for people to spend money while others believe that it would be better for people to save money. what are the causes and prove some solutions

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 it is sometimes thought that spending
money
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 more important for
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country's
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the country's economy, but
the country's economy but
a country's economy but
economy
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 but other people claim that the focus should be on saving
money
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. In
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 essay I will examine the main causes and their solutions.
Our
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We
 spent
money
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 plays a small part in the
country
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's
economy
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. In my opinion, the main reason people think spending their
money
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 is good for the
country
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's
economy
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 (different types of taxes). Costumes grow and grow every year. To solve the problem, the state should remove several of them or stop their growth. If
this
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 is done, they will probably stop thinking like that. I do not understand what is the use of saving
money
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? If people collect
money
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 there is no benefit for them or for the government.
It
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It's
 better for
economy
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 if people spend
money
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inside
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in
 the
country
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 than in
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
country
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. If they want us to spend
money
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 inside, they should build places for recreation. In conclusion, I believe that people's opinions will change. Because
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country's
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the country's economy
economy
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 does not consist only of the collected
money
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 of the people.

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