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Around the world it is likely that more adults will work from home and more children will study from home as computer technology becomes cheaper and more accessible. Do you think it is a negative or a positive development?

#world #adults #work #home #children #study #computer #technology #development
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Computer technology, web, Internet, Intranet all these are becoming more and more popular day by day
last
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 30 years.
Further
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, It looks like around the
world it
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world, it
 is likely that more adults will
work
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 from
home
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 and more children will study from
home
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 as computer technology becomes cheaper and more accessible. Now in the days Informatipn Technology field majorly famous for
work
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 from
home
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. Many IT professionals when they have some
work
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 at
home
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, many a times, they are always opting for "
work
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 from
home
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"
.
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This
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 trend
firstly
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, started from IT field and later on
introduced
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introducing
 in many fields,
Such
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 as BPO,
teli
(Greek mythology) one of the three Graces
Thalia
tali
tile
 callers etc.
For example
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, 2 years back some of my relatives granny was bed ridden in her
last
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 days. Her
grand son
a male grandchild
grandson
 is a computer programmer.
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, he
had opt
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had opted
for
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to
work
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 from
home
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 for
quiet
to a degree (not used with a negative)
quite
 long time.
Thus
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, it helped him to support his
grand mother
the mother of your father or mother
grandmother
 a lot. Even though there were 2 nurses hired for her, there was a male required as she was
very health lady
Suggestion
a very healthy lady
very healthy lady
, to make her sit
and to make her
Suggestion
and make her
laid
put into a certain place or abstract location
lay
 down on the bed.
Secondly
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, As the present Lock down is going on because of the Corona Virus
(
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(
Covid-19) and social distancing ought to be maintained, online classes are already going on for students from the teachers/colleges. To conclude, With the technology along with positive
in addition
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 to
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 negativity
also
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 is there.
For instance
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, client face to face meeting will be more effective.
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This
Suggestion
These
 online classes are another case, where students will be more serious in
class rooms
a room in a school where lessons take place
classrooms
 as teacher's presence will be there. With
parents
Suggestion
parents'
 children at
home
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 will become casual and take
onli
on a regular route of a railroad or bus or airline system
online
 classes lightly.
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