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Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are good at or that thay find the most interesting. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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School subjects are so important in our educational life, though the
some
closely similar or comparable in kind or quality or quantity or degree
same
 subjects are crucial, I believe that every youth should concentrate on the
subject
 that they are most interested in, because if you are interested in something you will be good at it. If teenagers focus on
one
subject
 that they are interested in they will be the best in
this
 specific
subject
, and it's better to know everything about something rather than knowing something about everything, and that's because all of us when we go to the doctor we don't want a doctor who know a little about everything, though that may seem good, but we want a doctor who knows everything about what he is doing to us so that we can be safe from any mistakes and be healthy and
this
 applies to everything in life even in schools. When teenagers put all of their efforts on
one
subject
 they will be more creative, productive, inspired and successfull in that particular
subject
 and that will result in new innovations that will help us in the future, where as the creativity exists the success will exist, but what will happen if every youth focused in everything,
first
 the youth will not be able to bring an innovation from something because he is not specialized in it,
also
 teenagers will be distracted from their own goals and ambitions, because teenager are so ambitious and uplifted by success, and to have that succes they need to focus on something until they became successfull in it
then
 they can focus on another
subject
.
lastly
Suggestion
Lastly
 teenagers should focus on
one
subject
 because that leads to success and creativity and without it the world would be less inspiring, less innovation would be created if people didn't focus on
one
 thing that they cared about.
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