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Some organizations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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A lot of different organizations and companies want their employees to dress adequately above any other requirement, while others prefer their workers to do their job well rather than ensuring they dress well enough. In my opinion, I agree that in some specific
work
 positions the
appearance
 can make a huge difference and be significant,
however
, I
also
 believe that
work
 should be valued according to other kind of factors. On
one
 hand, there’s a lot of
work
 where the physical
appearance
 of the worker is
one
 of the most important things when it comes to value their jobs. Especially those kinds of jobs where the worker is exposed to the public’s eyes and where the presence of customers is high, the way that
person
 looks is
one
 of the main keys to success.
One
 of the most common and controversial examples we have is that concerning the model industry. For companies around
this
 type of industry the number of sells a product can have it depends on how good a model looks, so, for
this
 reason their physical
appearance
 is the
one
 and only important thing.
On the other hand
, in the most of the
work
 places the
appearance
 of their workers is just
one
 of the many points a
person
 has to have in order to be well considered. Companies use to value the way a
person
 performs their
work
.
For example
, when it comes to doctors, the way they look may be an important point, but isn’t the most significant
one
 to be considered when they are valued for their
work
.
Finally
, the fact of a company deciding whether it’s crucial or not, that their employees have a good
appearance
 it depends on the company’s aim to sell. While in some jobs
such
 as publicity companies and model industry the
appearance
 is more valued in other’s
appearance
 is not even taken into consideration among their employees. In conclusion, I believe that despite for some jobs the seeming of a
person
 may be more important in order to
work
 property than in other jobs, skills
such
 as intelligence, determination or leadership should be equally valued.

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